Thread: Weds Alert, please check this new page at ALIPAC

Friends,

I have adjusted our contribute/join page at ALIPAC to provide more information and links. The final links will be in within ten minutes of this post.

Please help us by proofing this page and testing the links to make sure everything is accurate without typos etc....

http://www.alipac.us/modules.php?name=C ... page&pid=9

Please post any suggestions or needed changes here.

W

Thank your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

Shouldn't this be Thank you for your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

Your contributions are critical to fighting the powerful and well-funded opposition to following our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration.

Would it read better to say...your contributions are critical to fight the powerful and well-funded opposition and to monitor our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration? I don't know if this is what you meant to say.

Otherwise I think it looks very good W and the links work.

ALIPAC has rapidly become on of America's largest and most effective organizations fighting illegal immigration since our founding on 9/11/2004 due to your friendship and support.

Should be one instead of "on."

Contributions to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for Congress or US Senate

The U.S. Senate is part of the U.S. Congress.

Would one of these sentences work better?

Contributions to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for the U.S. Congress.

Contribution to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for the U.S. House of Representatives and the U.S. Senate.

Contributions to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for Congress or US Senate.

Not sure the "are about the same" works. It's either the same or it's not. If there are differences, perhaps you should elaborate on the differences. Just a suggestion.

Sorry, don't mean to be nitpicky.

Originally Posted by working4change

Thank your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

Shouldn't this be Thank you for your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

[quote:ytoo1kr6]
Your contributions are critical to fighting the powerful and well-funded opposition to following our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration.

Would it read better to say...your contributions are critical to fight the powerful and well-funded opposition and to monitor our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration? I don't know if this is what you meant to say.

Otherwise I think it looks very good W and the links work.[/quote:ytoo1kr6]

WorkingForChange,

I attempted to make the changes you recommended but could not find them on the page you are proofing. Please provide me with the link and exact location. Are we proofing the same page?

W

Originally Posted by MW

ALIPAC has rapidly become on of America's largest and most effective organizations fighting illegal immigration since our founding on 9/11/2004 due to your friendship and support.

Should be one instead of "on."

[quote:36b260cz]Contributions to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for Congress or US Senate

The U.S. Senate is part of the U.S. Congress.

Would one of these sentences work better?

Contributions to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for the U.S. Congress.

Contribution to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for the U.S. House of Representatives and the U.S. Senate.

Contributions to ALIPAC are about the same as contributions to candidates for Congress or US Senate.

Not sure the "are about the same" works. It's either the same or it's not. If there are differences, perhaps you should elaborate on the differences. Just a suggestion.

Sorry, don't mean to be nitpicky. [/quote:36b260cz]

Thank you very much MW.

I have applied your changes.

W

Originally Posted by ALIPAC

Originally Posted by working4change

Thank your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

Shouldn't this be Thank you for your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

[quote:2ve2avzp]
Your contributions are critical to fighting the powerful and well-funded opposition to following our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration.

Would it read better to say...your contributions are critical to fight the powerful and well-funded opposition and to monitor our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration? I don't know if this is what you meant to say.

Otherwise I think it looks very good W and the links work.

WorkingForChange,

I attempted to make the changes you recommended but could not find them on the page you are proofing. Please provide me with the link and exact location. Are we proofing the same page?

W[/quote:2ve2avzp]


W. it's the link to Donate by mail on the contribution page

Contribute to ALIPAC's Efforts Against Illegal Immigration & Amnesty!




Donate with PayPal - - Donate with a Credit Card - - Donate by Mail

Originally Posted by working4change

Originally Posted by ALIPAC

Originally Posted by working4change

Thank your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

Shouldn't this be Thank you for your interest in donating to ALI PAC.

[quote:2uyijad5]
Your contributions are critical to fighting the powerful and well-funded opposition to following our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration.

Would it read better to say...your contributions are critical to fight the powerful and well-funded opposition and to monitor our existing laws to stop the tide of illegal immigration? I don't know if this is what you meant to say.

Otherwise I think it looks very good W and the links work.

WorkingForChange,

I attempted to make the changes you recommended but could not find them on the page you are proofing. Please provide me with the link and exact location. Are we proofing the same page?

W

W. it's the link to Donate by mail on the contribution page

Contribute to ALIPAC's Efforts Against Illegal Immigration & Amnesty!




Donate with PayPal - - Donate with a Credit Card - - Donate by Mail[/quote:2uyijad5]

Oh, ok, we will be proofing those pages a little later after this one is complete

W

I made a few minor chages and checked the links.

Dixie

Thank you team, I think we are good to go on this page.

W

William wrote:

Thank you very much MW.

You're welcome.