Thread: Please, I need help!!

I am trying to write a letter to the editor about the Indiana legislation against employers of illegals. I can't get it short enough to be published. Would anyone be willing to throw their two cents in and help me edit this?

Thank you

this is my letter:


My husband and I recently moved here because Axxxx looks like a great place to raise our son. The crime rate is low compared to our former residence in California, and the people here are wonderful.

Since our arrival, I have grown very concerned about what is currently a small problem in Axxxxx, but unless action is taken immediately, it will become a nightmare like the one we just left. The problem I am referring to is Illegal Immigration. It is a cancer on our society and culture, which in the beginning seems benign, but grows until there is nothing left.

While in my old town, I watched as hospitals that have been there for generations were closed down. From 1996-2004 a total of 79 hospitals were closed down, primarily because of the Undocumented Worker situation.

This is not even taking into effect the economic ramifications of an undocumented workforce. Although sub-minimum wage is good for the bottom line in businesses, it has demoralizing and drastic affects on US wages. In a recently published Harvard study, Illegal immigrants cost Arizonans at least $1.4 billion in lower wages in 2005. The increase in Undocumented workers has drastically affected the lower-wage earners in this country. These are the workers who can least absorb a drop in wages. This has caused a substantial increase in the number of US citizens living below the poverty level.

I have heard it said that most undocumented workers come to this country for a better life, but not all of them are here for that reason. You have to remember, there is not a single law abiding undocumented worker in this country. The very fact that they are here, against US Immigration law, is proof beyond a reasonable doubt that they do not respect and obey our laws. Just for fun, go online and look at each States 10 most wanted lists. You will find a shocking pattern.

Indiana has the opportunity to protect Hoosiers. Rep. Patrick Bauer is trying to prevent this. The Senate passed Senate bill 335 by a 37-11 margin. These Senators understood the need to take care of the citizens of this great State. Call your representative today and demand that Rep. Bauer stop kissing up to big business and to do the right thing by the people of Indiana

My husband and I recently moved here because Axxxx looks like a great place to raise our son. The problem I am referring to is Illegal Immigration. Call your representative today and demand that Rep. Bauer stop kissing up to big business and to do the right thing by the people of Indiana.

How short do you want it? Do you have a word count?

R/ Skip

I think it is a very well written letter cayla, good job!

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My husband and I recently moved to Axxxx, it looks like a great place to raise our son. The crime rate is low and the people here are wonderful.

Since our arrival, I have grown very concerned about illegal immigration. It is a cancer on our society and culture. In the beginning it seems benign, but grows until there is nothing left.

In my previous home town hospitals were closed down, primarily because of the free services granted illegal aliens. The increase in undocumented workers also negatively affected the lower-wage earners in this country. These illegal workers depress wages. This has caused a substantial increase in the number of US citizens living below the poverty level.

Additionally, many undocumented workers not only use fale or stolen identities to secure employment, but to commit other crimes. They do not respect and obey our laws. Go online and look at each States 10 most wanted lists. You will find a shocking pattern.

Indiana has the opportunity to protect Hoosiers. The Senate passed bill 335, this bill would impose penalties against employers who knowingly hire illegal aliens. Call your representative today and demand they also support this bill. Thank you.

Originally Posted by Skip

My husband and I recently moved here because Axxxx looks like a great place to raise our son. The problem I am referring to is Illegal Immigration. Call your representative today and demand that Rep. Bauer stop kissing up to big business and to do the right thing by the people of Indiana.

How short do you want it? Do you have a word count?

R/ Skip

They just say short to fit in the letters spaces, no actual count.

Ok, never having sent a letter to the editor before, do you think this is still too long?

My husband and I recently moved to Axxxxx, it looks like a great place to raise our son. The crime rate is low and the people here are wonderful.

Since our arrival, I have grown very concerned about what is currently a small problem in Anderson, but unless action is taken immediately, it will grow into a nightmare. The problem I am referring to is Illegal Immigration. It is a cancer on our society and culture, which in the beginning seems benign, but grows until there is nothing left. I have witnessed first hand the costs.

In my previous state, from 1996-2004 a total of 79 hospitals were closed down, primarily because of the free services granted illegal aliens.

The illegal workforce also has an impact on wages. Sub-minimum wage might be good for businesses, but it has drastic affects on US wages. The people affected are our lower-wage earners, those who can least afford it. In a recently published Harvard study, Illegal immigrants cost Arizonans at least $1.4 billion in lower wages in 2005. This has caused a substantial increase in the number of US citizens living below the poverty level.

Additionally, many undocumented workers not only use false or stolen identities to secure employment, but to commit other crimes as well. They do not respect and obey our laws. Go online and look at each States 10 most wanted lists. You will find a shocking pattern.

Indiana has the opportunity to protect Hoosiers. Rep. Patrick Bauer is trying to prevent this. The Senate passed Senate bill 335 by a 37-11 margin. These Senators understood the need to take care of the citizens of this great State. Call your representative today and demand that Rep. Bauer stop kissing up to big business and to do the right thing by the people of Indiana

or should I go with choice no. 2

My husband and I recently moved to Anderson, it looks like a great place to raise our son. The crime rate is low and the people here are wonderful.

Since our arrival, I have grown very concerned about what is currently a small problem, but unless action is taken immediately, it will grow into a nightmare. The problem I am referring to is Illegal Immigration. It is a cancer on our society and culture, which in the beginning seems benign, but grows until there is nothing left. I have witnessed first hand the costs.

In my previous state, from 1996-2004 a total of 79 hospitals were closed down, primarily because of the free services granted illegal aliens.

The illegal workforce also has an impact on wages. Sub-minimum wage might be good for businesses, but it has drastic affects on US wages. The people affected are our lower-wage earners, those who can least afford it. This has caused a substantial increase in the number of US citizens living below the poverty level.

Additionally, many undocumented workers not only use false or stolen identities to secure employment, but to commit other crimes as well. They do not respect and obey our laws. Go online and look at each States 10 most wanted lists. You will find a shocking pattern.

Indiana has the opportunity to protect Hoosiers. Rep. Patrick Bauer is trying to prevent this. The Senate passed Senate bill 335 by a 37-11 margin. These Senators understood the need to take care of the citizens of this great State. Call your representative today and demand that Rep. Bauer stop kissing up to big business and to do the right thing by the people of Indiana

or are both still too long to stand a chance at being published?

Either letter sounds good. Just go for it. The editors will whittle it down if they think its too long.

good luck....I have sent over a dozen "Letters" to our local paper here in Las Vegas....not one published..... word of caution....I use my real first name...but I use my maiden name....They publish your name and city.....I am single and I am in the phone book....so...I do not want any illegal looking me up....I have gotten a call from the paper to "verify" my letter and since they asked for me by my first name...all was good and they were happy...but it was never published...so..good luck

Thanks,

IFire asked us to all write letters to be published asap and I had never done that before

I use my sisters name lolol. She died in a car accident in 1992 at the age of 22. I know she would not mind, and if anyone calls looking for her, I know it is really me.